It needs a better title, but I can't even think right now.
Bad Luck by CailinLiath is short humorous fiction at its best: hints of an interesting, greater setting pair well with madcap disasters following the subject of the piece (
That's actually really quite amazing. The amount of detail and movement you described is beautifully put and flows exceptionally well together. (Although, I found a slight typing error ) You should certainly become an author... if you aren't already!!!
"On social occasions, every man had some Charlie characteristics: this one his profile, that one his shoulders, another his eyes. It was as if the City were populated by prototype Charlies. But none of them had his smile. She had tried to forget about Charlie, tried to dismiss his constant periphery, but it was difficult with these ever-present reminders, these almosts."
I really love this paragraph! I hope you're proud of it. What a thoughtful way to say something so many people have said in such cliche ways. Nice work