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FFM #1
Three days, 998 words.

It needs a better title, but I can't even think right now.
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Given 2014-08-20
Bad Luck by CailinLiath is short humorous fiction at its best: hints of an interesting, greater setting pair well with madcap disasters following the subject of the piece ( Featured by ShadowedAcolyte )
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artbyfieldsofsage Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The title is perfect ... the story, the writing, is wonderful ... and I congratulate you on the well-deserved DD!
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Trippy4U Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014
Congrats...fine work :clap:
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AnuPdin Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2014
interesting style! this somehow reminds me of Lazarus Long stories..
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JohnJones202 Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014
I enjoyed reading that quite a bit! That's a hell of a short story.
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ZimmyRose Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
That's actually really quite amazing. The amount of detail and movement you described is beautifully put and flows exceptionally well together. (Although, I found a slight typing error ;) )
You should certainly become an author... if you aren't already!!!
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sevenofeleven Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014
Well done.

How about:
"Her Laser sight Reflected"
"Bad luck better than no luck"
The Man of Dis hour's disasters.
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doublethefun Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014
"On social occasions, every man had some Charlie characteristics: this one his profile, that one his shoulders, another his eyes. It was as if the City were populated by prototype Charlies. But none of them had his smile. She had tried to forget about Charlie, tried to dismiss his constant periphery, but it was difficult with these ever-present reminders, these almosts."

I really love this paragraph! I hope you're proud of it. What a thoughtful way to say something so many people have said in such cliche ways. Nice work :)
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ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014
"It was as if the City were populated by prototype Charlies." is one of the freshest descriptions of the feeling of having a huge crush that I've read in a long time.
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LeftUnfinished Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome, witty and unique. :clap: 
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old-doc Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Fun and really racy flash fiction. A lot of narrative in less than 1000 words. Great!
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